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1. 第一段

I think curiosity and the desire to understand the process of life are characteristic to human beings. Over thousands of years, mankind has found different ways like magic, religion or science to explain the phenomena of nature.

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Curiosity and the desire to understand the process of life are characteristic to human beings. Over thousands of years, mankind has found different ways such as magic, region or science to explain the phenomena of nature.

2. 第二段

The difference between scientific theories and other approaches is that science is based on the existence of evidence. The first step in research is to collect hypotheses. By observation the scientist gains insight and forms a theory. In an experiment with defines parameters the outcome can be measured and ideas can be either proved or disproved. Nevertheless it is difficult to deduce from artificially created scenarios to universal laws, especially in natural science. In nature a lot of variabilities exist, e.g. no human beings equals another and those differences can’t be included in experiments.

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The difference between scientific theories and other approaches is that science is based on the generation of evidence. The first step in research is to put forward hypotheses. By observation, the scientist gains insight and forms a theory. In an experiment with defined parameters, the outcome can be measured and ideas can be verified or falsified. Nevertheless, it is difficult to proceed from artificially created scenarios to universal laws, especially in natural science. In nature, much variation exists**; for instance,* no human being equals another*. Such** differences cannot be included in experiments.

参考文献

Tim Skern: 《Writing Scientific English: A Workbook》