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2017-06-05 09:38
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Medical examinations and psychological surveys were done on different body decoration fashion amongst people of young generation. Over 10000 were involved in the examinations including blood tests for hepatitis C virus as well as psychological surveys. The results show a dependence of the rate of positive hepatitis C virus infection tests on the age and on the time when the body decorations were done. The psychological effects of body decoration vary with age.
问：实验做（test）了什么？结果显示（show）什么？工作揭示（reveal）了什么？虽然你能在原文中找到一一对应的句子，但是最好千万不要让英文论文的读者自己去揣摩意思，这样读者可能会看得云里雾里，原因很大程度上在于笔者写作能力的问题。建议：那个动作的目的，目的，目的一定要直接表现出来，通常用动词表达——总的来说，这就是上下这两个段落之间的水平差别，即：是否存在着一个逻辑层来引导阅读思路的问题。
重要的事情：1. 动作的目的一定要直接表现出来，2. 动作的目的一定要直接表现出来， 3. 动作的目的一定要直接表现出来。好的正式文体是直白叙述的，是“傻瓜式”的，是跨国界的，是任何行外人都能轻松读懂的（比如：跨国界的句子是容易理解而无歧义的，如“1+1=2”一般）！记住：这里的“1+1=2”不是说一加一真的等于二，而是说这个句子的形式简单漂亮，任何国家的人都能轻松理解。OK，这是本文的目的，更是写好任何文章的重点！
Medical examinations and psychological surveys were done on over 10,000 young people to detect the differences in and effects of body decoration. The examinations tested blood samples for hepatitis C virus. The results showed that the probability of a positive hepatitis C virus test depends on the person’s age and the age at which the body decorations were done. The psychological surveys revealed that the effects of body decoration vary with age.
参考文献
Tim Skern: 《Writing Scientific English: A Workbook》
Medical examinations and psychological surveys were done on different body decoration fashion amongst people of young generation. Over 10000 were involved in the examinations including blood tests for hepatitis C virus as well as psychological surveys. The results show a dependence of the rate of positive hepatitis C virus infection tests on the age and on the time when the body decorations were done. The psychological effects of body decoration vary with age.
问：实验做（test）了什么？结果显示（show）什么？工作揭示（reveal）了什么？虽然你能在原文中找到一一对应的句子，但是最好千万不要让英文论文的读者自己去揣摩意思，这样读者可能会看得云里雾里，原因很大程度上在于笔者写作能力的问题。建议：那个动作的目的，目的，目的一定要直接表现出来，通常用动词表达——总的来说，这就是上下这两个段落之间的水平差别，即：是否存在着一个逻辑层来引导阅读思路的问题。
重要的事情：1. 动作的目的一定要直接表现出来，2. 动作的目的一定要直接表现出来， 3. 动作的目的一定要直接表现出来。好的正式文体是直白叙述的，是“傻瓜式”的，是跨国界的，是任何行外人都能轻松读懂的（比如：跨国界的句子是容易理解而无歧义的，如“1+1=2”一般）！记住：这里的“1+1=2”不是说一加一真的等于二，而是说这个句子的形式简单漂亮，任何国家的人都能轻松理解。OK，这是本文的目的，更是写好任何文章的重点！
Medical examinations and psychological surveys were done on over 10,000 young people to detect the differences in and effects of body decoration. The examinations tested blood samples for hepatitis C virus. The results showed that the probability of a positive hepatitis C virus test depends on the person’s age and the age at which the body decorations were done. The psychological surveys revealed that the effects of body decoration vary with age.
参考文献
Tim Skern: 《Writing Scientific English: A Workbook》
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